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loved
loved
May 28, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

the distant cry

the distant cry
from within
desire to sweep the past
with sunrise’s fast arrival...
to
let the time’s tolls be due
let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue
wipe the sweat of my brow
forget the loathe-some
of a long distant occurrence
with demise of thoughts of desperate dreams
manifestations
of things gone astray

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

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loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

GREAT

young lady
write more poetry /articles,,, it reduces stress also
when in stress
MEDITATE
AND
when in loneliness read my poetry \
POEM

'' WHEN IN LONELINESS THINK OF ME''

weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 1 month ago

Some of your best poetryis very good,

and this is one of them. But the majority of your work is incoherent rubbish.

I Eanestly entreat you to take time with your poems and don't write the mindless, contrived meaningles crap that forms the majority of your work
Pleading for recognition is pathetic.
with respect, yes.

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

I love the sledge hammer.

looking forwards to more
if I can myself be happy
with 51 poems for sure,
I want nothing more.

Crap is like garbage
as you say ,
glad you are so frank,
Jess
do come more often my way.

But the ....majority* ....of your work is incoherent rubbish......

READ
*MAXORITY ==MAXIMUMORITY===1/8000

weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 1 month ago

I have seen the best of your work and it is truly profound

I can only suggest you spend a little more time thinking through what you say, instead of spilling garbage on your page.

You know I would ignore you if I didn't believe in your ability. And you would get much more positive feedback if you didn't write 80% rubbish and spend the rest of the time pathetically pleading for recognition.

You have the ability, the talent, just don't write 80 to one rubbish, take care of every word you say, and you will get the recognition your deserve.

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

Aye , Aye Sir...

grateful....
shall
and
hence be more diligent
as advised
tc

weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 1 month ago

My dear Loved, my word is my mood

and should never be taken as gospel.

Let's just say I loved this poem and forget the rest of what I said, ok?
You deserve unconditional kudos for your achievement.

Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

13 years 1 month ago

This was a most unusual poem,

This was a most unusual poem, potent in its own way, I liked these lines
"let flowers reek, perfume somehow
red, crimson and blue"

making flowers reek was a genius stroke.

Ann.

loved

loved

13 years 1 month ago

I am grateful

for your fleeting visit
and
beautiful expression ma'am