DITCHED HOTEL

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Ditched Hotel" presents a vivid and eerie depiction of an abandoned hotel. The use of descriptive language and metaphors enhances the overall atmosphere of the poem. However, there are several areas that could be improved to make the poem more coherent and impactful.

1. Grammar and Syntax: There are several instances where the grammar and syntax could be improved. For example, in the line "and guests giving know option but to disappear", it seems like "know" should be "no". Also, the use of "and" at the beginning of some sentences disrupts the flow of the poem.

2. Punctuation: The poem could benefit from more consistent punctuation. For example, there are places where full stops could be used to separate ideas more clearly.

3. Structure: The structure of the poem is somewhat disjointed, with ideas not always clearly connected. For example, the transition from the hotel to the forest and guest house is not clear.

4. Imagery: While the poem does a good job of creating a spooky atmosphere, some of the imagery could be more specific. For example, instead of "ghouls breath", the poem could describe the specific sensations or visuals associated with this concept.

5. Clarity: The poem could benefit from more clarity in its narrative or theme. While the spooky atmosphere is well established, it's not clear what the poem is trying to convey beyond this. Is it a commentary on abandonment? A ghost story? Clarifying this could give the poem more depth.

6. Word Choice: Some of the word choices could be improved to better fit the tone and theme of the poem. For example, "nosey guests" feels somewhat casual compared to the rest of the poem's language.

In summary, while the poem does a good job of creating a spooky atmosphere, it could benefit from improvements in grammar, punctuation, structure, imagery, clarity, and word choice.

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I much enjoyed your take on the contest! I especially enjoyed these lines:

twisting Into the abyss black
tunnels and up staircases
with an ethereal glow. Like
nosey guests going over
the place with a torch
Investigating like an detective

good luck on the contest!
*hugs, Cat

The imagery in poetry WS. is concluded long ago. Maybe that's why!

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Talk to Mark or Paul if you need to clear it up... they are good people who know what they are doing and can help you.

*hugs, Cat