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Nov 08, 2018
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Doggy (not style) but Kiss...humorusssssssss please
When I was a kid
in a school
the Hansi/laughter poet
read a poetry
about his earnest desire
to be a dog
he spoke in Hindi
I copied it
translated it
here 'tis
If i had been a dog
I’d kiss all misses
for free
all over anywhere
any one could see
and
feel jealous of me
then he smiled
O god let me
in my next birth
a dog be
no damn girl
here ever kisses me
promise will thee
He softly heard
(a yes ...doggy)
What else is there in life
but LOVE
conveyed thru just a peck
a KISS
can anyone
tell me
in exchange for
just a
SWEET HONEY KISS
will ye
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Eumolpus
6 years 8 months ago
This is a very fun poem
Good to see it from you with all the recent woes. Just warming.
I thought the poem ended
He softly heard
(a yes ...doggy)
Ends just right for me! When I opened to comment saw the last stranza and ...personally I like it better without it. The last stanza explains too much.
Anybody agree or disagree?
..
lovedly
6 years 8 months ago
I shall see EUMOL
Whether the poem needs a replay
then others add on
they may
it's a fun funny poem
a true one
all my true poems are original
no added flavours