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Shelby Pryor
Shelby Pryor
Feb 24, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Don't You Dare Quit

You can cry and you can scream
You can beg and drag yourself along
You can bleed or you can crawl
But don't you stop singing that song

You won't be victorious every time
You won't always leave with the win
The true test of a passion is losing
And then getting up and trying again

Tears slip from your eyes in the rain
But your goal don't you ever forget
You can do anything if you keep going
Friends, Don't You Dare Quit

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

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Comments

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 4 months ago

Another

I like your positivity. It’s a great addition here at the site and it’s something I struggle with from time to time. Thank you for your reaffirmations. They remind me that I too hold all the power in the way I think.

Obviously good pattern and rhythm
Tim

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 4 months ago

The theme is good...

The rhyme and near-rhyme are nice and easy. You leave a positive message and what more could anyone ask for?
Nicely done! ~ Geezer.
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Shelby Pryor

Shelby Pryor

2 years 4 months ago

Geezer

Thank you for the complement, always a honor to hear from you!