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Nov 18, 2010
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Donuts
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the donut shop is closed
he sits on the doorstep
and he waits
what kind of a man does that
is he slow, like dumb
or simply wise in patience and purpose
a pitiful lost soul
or deeply grounded in self-understanding
is his mind a'grumble
or in the blissful glow of anticipation
the donut shop is closed
he sits on the doorstep
and he waits
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
14 years 8 months ago
Yes!...
Excellent! I see you wondering, as I often do; What is his/her motivation? Only criticism I see, is : He sits [on] the doorstep, and I would add, and [he] waits. Great job! ~ Gee
scribbler
14 years 8 months ago
donut
he wants what he wants when he wants it.......scribbler
Kailashana2
14 years 8 months ago
Is this a poem about Homer
Is this a poem about Homer Simpson?
Just kidding, you had me with the title.
~A