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the door (feb. contest)
the bus came to a merry standstill. the merry was inside us;
young and vibrant schoolboys on our way back home.
the bus came to a startling halt inside me
as i look for our house in the, now unfamiliar surroundings.
standing on our land was the remnants of a house,
the remnants of a life... of our dreams
i felt unmerry and dry... older than minutes before.
i was looking for the door I used to run through as a little boy.
i looked up as my father's Willys pulled up beside me.
he knew that i would go look for them back home
he was minutes too late to spare me the brunt
of a system that did not care a damn.
he looked strange at first. maybe i could not picture him
anywhere else, but in Kousas... our home.
after a while i actualized that the tall man
in the Willys was my father.
we entered a house though a steel door in a farther away township
we entered through a new door... a door to submissiveness
which we never entertained. but we grew up
and never lost our identity to white supremacy.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
judyanne
10 years 4 months ago
powerful nokros
A great entry
But you need to add this to the contest stream, or it may be missed
Just go into edit mode, and click onto the contest box at the bottom
Best of luck in the contest
Love judy
xxx
Rula
10 years 4 months ago
hello Nokros
A distinguished door indeed. I love this contest as it revealed many doors we never thought they even exist.
Best of luck in the contest.
As dear Judy pointed out, I wanted to ensure that you need to include the contest's name from the drop down menu > open to new participants.
nokros
10 years 4 months ago
i thank you
Judy and Rula for your fine comments and guidance
scribbler
10 years 4 months ago
Hello
A powerfully slammed door which symbolized the old life on one side and the new on the other. thanks for entering contest........stan
nokros
10 years 4 months ago
thanx Stan
for visiting... appreciate.