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06/25 Doctor is Bored During Surgery

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Dr God

Eyes slimming and painted
In organ red, saliva dripping
onto the gentlemen, lying down
on the cool table, gas mask
fastened around his head.

The scalpel in my fist I used
with precision the salty drip
from my heavy brow splashed
on incision. Muffled breathing
hid my excitement and tongue
Slipping out in concentration.

Another body, useless without
my help. Quicker than lightening
I swap my tools for another. My
long white coat whips like the
wind in a rain storm.

My trusting blue hue
mask fastened over my
face hiding my identity.
I have saved lifes for
more than two decades
and killed just as many
I'm god and you are my
subjects.

I'm also a serial Killer in
hiding. My mind shows
me a strangulation my
hands
had made the other night.
The Rain rushing down like
cold nails, the sky black as
a chalkboard. The streets
and entrys naked of slapping
footsteps, and splashing
vehicles.

Yes I'm bored, but to create
upwards mouths I must
concentrate for now.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Uk, GBR

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 weeks 4 days ago

Hmmmm...

I think I detect a pattern here. All the clues lead... well, maybe I should let the rest of them figure it out for themselves. Nice storytelling. ~ Geezer.

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Lavender

Lavender

2 weeks 4 days ago

Dr. God

I agree - very nice storytelling.  Actually gives me chills...

L

Jokerface82

Jokerface82

2 weeks 3 days ago

Thank you

I like the idea that he's saving lives and taking them away. The attire his profession, and results give him that trust worthy side to him. I just let my writing talk and not think to much about it, it was fun to write. Ty for the comments and glad it gave one of you chills haha