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Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Jan 11, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Drawn

Wrap me in your gravity
This interstellar travel
Sailing on the galaxies
As time itself unravels
Your heat is burning like a star
Your touch provides the light
Careening through my atmosphere
This meteoric night
Be my sunrise and my moon
My lazy grateful dawn
Yet every night your silver shines
Back into you I’m drawn

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

dear Tim,

it isn't just what you say, but the way you say it that makes you unique and gorgeous. I am ever in awe... perfect and sublime.

*hugs, Cat

I like the story within story aspect!
*ever, eddy

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Ya know

I took a big step when I got here on the site and I never write anything without thinking about what you told me about boring words. There are always better action verbs and articles are dull…best advice I’ve ever received and you’ll notice I pass it on often.

I do like to create an alternative reality that all these poems and songs and artwork I create can live in. Like Nietzche said, “no artist tolerates reality”

You are in fact the best,
Tim

Simon

Simon

2 years 6 months ago

Good piece

This is so quick but sweet to read over and over.

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 6 months ago

I couldn't...

find a flaw anywhere! This is such a good one, that I didn't want it to end! Yes Simon, you are right; "so quick" and sweet to read over and over. Nice! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Drawn

Hi, Tim,
Be my sunrise and my moon.
What a rush it must have been to write those stunning words! Breathtaking...
L

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Ugh

Because I’m lazy I suppose. That’s a bunch of decisions I need to make when I should be writing the next poem. Usually my stuff is organized in such a way where every line is it’s own thought, not always and I do realize that is confusing occasionally. I write on my iPhone in the notes app. When I hit return I get a capital letter to start the next line and I have to hit an extra character to turn off the caps. All the while I’m losing the idea trying to decide if I should capitalize. I write in a frenzy and it very rarely takes more than 5-10 minutes to write something like this. Sorry if it makes certain lines seem disjointed.

Thanks for your amazing compliments,
Tim

Seren

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Dear Tim

I'm going to run out of superlatives for your poetry. This is another cracking write. Your wife is a lucky woman I hope she enjoys them as nuch as we all do

Bravo ny friend

Love Jayne xxx

Seren

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Dear Tim

I'm going to run out of superlatives for your poetry. This is another cracking write. Your wife is a lucky woman I hope she enjoys them as nuch as we all do

Bravo ny friend

Love Jayne xxx