Dream Destination

Hope was in driver's seat
coursing on the subconscious freeway
dreaming to a pseudo destination
just beyond the stretch of imagination

Flashes of brilliance leading to a tunnel
"Park your bodies , let go of your final breath,
This way to Salvation"
proclaimed the Signage

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

raj

14 years 10 months ago

Wanted to add an element of

Wanted to add an element of mystery to the Title, hence changed it from "Hopefully" to "Destination X"

raj

14 years 10 months ago

Thank you Xena

good to know you liked it...

warmly..

scribbler

14 years 10 months ago

dream

Much better driven by hope than despair. A good short poem.............scribbler

raj

14 years 10 months ago

Thank you Stan for the time

Thank you Stan for the time to read this one and appreciative comment..

warmly....

Race_9togo

14 years 10 months ago

Hey Raj,

This is a really good metaphor. And I love the tunnel imagery, that's just magic, especially for a long-commute driver like me, heehee.

And I agree with Scribbler...better hope than despair in the driver's seat.

raj

14 years 10 months ago

Dear Jim..

good to know you liked the use of the metaphor...thank you for your words...

warmly...

raj

14 years 10 months ago

Thank you for your comment....as an amateur i use poetry as a means of unwinding and de-stressing from the daily routine....when it comes good (not always) and is appreciated by readers like you..it keeps me inspired to keep learning and evolving...which is why i find Neopoet a great workshop...

warmly...

raj

14 years 9 months ago