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Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Jun 29, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dream Garden

We dream beneath a blanket of stars
The vastness of which approaches infinite
I reach up and pluck the brightest one
And place it in your collection basket

Hold this dream for me my dearest
In such case as I forget it
For waking minds our dreams do trample
And leave us full of false regrets

Plant it in your hearts’ green garden
With care and light so it may grow
A fledgling universe of dreams
Like all the other seeds we’ve sown

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Any and all criticism is helpful. Thanks!

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years ago

dear Rosewood,

I have no criticism. it is a lovely poem from start to finish it speaks of your mutual adoration and what you share. may many strong, healthy seeds grow in the garden of your life's planning. may you only water it with tears of joy...

my favorite lines are:

Plant it in your hearts green garden
With care and light so it may grow
A fledgling universe of dreams
Like all the other seeds we’ve sown

with admiration, Cat

*

Geezer

Geezer

3 years ago

Sweet...

and succinct. Nice job, not sure, but possibly the best I've seen from you. ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years ago

Poem...

outstanding artistry!
Apt yet beautiful.

I have no expression of disapproval.

One

One

3 years ago

Tim

an clever, image soaked, atmospheric & emotional write. No critique required.

You allow the reader to view the scene you've crafted through their own eyes.

regards

One.

lovedly

lovedly

3 years ago

See how you have planted so many dreams

I keep thinking The best stanza Cat's has pinned it I was going to
I have many a dream
hope you would love to be a participant
of my imagery
I am not a poem
but am a byte
of poetree
soon a megabyte
may be