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Dreamdoor

You fell into the abyss,
But did you let go...
When darkness gets heavy,
Wear it like a blanket...

A curtain of glass,
Dont stride in too fast,
As you already are,
On the other side...

Laughter like snow,
Fresh cotton candy,
Melts in the mouth,
And flows to the heart...

Lit up and sparkling,
Eyes like the night sky,
Bejewelled with gems,
Of stars not seen before...

Come join me for a bite,
A slice of the moon,
Or a piece of this sky,
No one will miss a corner...

Then off shall we go,
For a ride on this breeze,
Lets invite the Gods,
Lest they feel envy's...

When you would wake up,
Then dont blink too hard,
Open your eyes gently,
As dreams are fragile...

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Written as a tribute to the great indian poet and lyricist Gulzar...

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Seren

Seren

10 years 3 months ago

Hello :)

Haven't had the pleasure of reading your poetry before and this is just amazing you have me hooked i'll be around from time to time annoying you ;)

spectacular poem great tribute

Kind regards Jayne