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Aug 14, 2022
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Dreamland
If only I weren't so impulsive
I might just take time to see
Whatever it is in me that pulses
And offer some sincerity
I'm sorry you're so lost in anguish
Maybe it'd help you to dream
Of a world where we have more than wishes
There would you meet me for tea?
Tell me your sorrows, your sorries, your fears
And together we'll drink til we can't
I'll listen to learn I needn't be more than ears
Rest your eyes in case they go aslant
We'll go for a walk through a clearing
It's clear this dream is one we share
We know it's just us that they're fearing
But just us just can't seem to care
Tell me the reasons for your tides of tears
And together we'll make the world new
But after all seasons, and when the dust clears
We may wish for a different view
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I wrote this as a sort of letter of reassurance to myself, but also subconsciously to any and all who have felt lost in their own impulses and are seeking a slower, softer, simpler path through the great dream of life.
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Jackweb
3 years 2 months ago
Welcome aboard!
Your poem clearly resonates with me. Is very advisable we talk to ourself up and learn to be assertive.
Delete the double word (weren't)
Beautifully written!
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jaspre
3 years 1 month ago
Thank you!
Thank you for the kind welcome and for catching my mistake, it seems I still forget to slow down and double check my impulses despite what I wrote about above.
Jackweb
3 years 1 month ago
You are welcome
Keep writing!
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