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Feb 05, 2013
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Dressed
The thrill of the chase
satin and lace
The ecstasy of being caught
wedding dress sought
The miracle of first born
christening gown, already worn
The sadness of divorce
dressed for hearse
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
12 years 4 months ago
I get the idea
however it reads a bit like a list.
Usually I suggest less words not more, this could benefit from conjunctions.
sueb
12 years 4 months ago
thanks x
thanks x