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Jul 21, 2011
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drops of you
the smell of you
permeates my skin
drops of you
resonate
i am a bow for your
plucking, you are my
instrument
play me
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lou
14 years ago
Anna
This is a sensual poem, but I'd change the word smell in the first line, maybe you could say, 'your trace permeates my skin,' or 'the trace of you permeates my skin'.
Lou
Kailashana2
14 years ago
Lou!
Lou!
I did not want to make this a sickeningly sweet poem....using scent of you or fragrance of you, so the *smell* seemed appropriate when engaging in animal lust, modified with a little *music*..
:-)
~A
lou
14 years ago
Anna
Fine
Lou
Kailashana2
14 years ago
Hmmm. This is a purely
Hmmm. This is a purely sexual poem, Ian. The bow refers to body and the instrument refers to well... you know...and so by now you can gather what song is being played...?.
Thanks for reading Ian. And maybe it is a cliche. lol.
~A