Drowning in the Past

In the poem, along with the metre helps make a musical poem. A regular rhyme aids the memory for recitation and gives a predictable pleasure.
Nice job!
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This is really on point. Indicative of your musicality. Obviously great rhythm and rhyme. I like the soft rhyming which I believe I’ve commented on before.

Excellent,
Tim

you might trim this down to make
the lines a little smoother. Here are some things I might do:

My tears and drowning feel much alike
I try to scream, but lose the fight
My barren words won't ease the shroud
Evaporating, in emotionaless clouds

In short time, I was given hope
I found a better, brighter road
Now, to just lay down my work
I cannot bear to stand and look

As always, these ideas are yours to use or not, maybe after some reflection
you may have a better idea. ~ Geezer.

Reflecting on where we have been, where we are and where we would like to be can be a difficult task but you displayed the motions and emotions beautifully here. Sometimes we have to go back to move forward. Good job!