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The Drunk

I lean on the edge of here and there
A poet blessed with a cloud of despair
I am inspired
Can I build a house?
Will it be?
Do I require 70%
Enough, I despise myself
My greedy hands

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

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Country/Region: United States

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weirdelf

weirdelf

6 years 9 months ago

Good. To the point.

Is the number 70% of particular significance?
Generally it is a good idea to write numbers 'seventy per cent' unless there is a specific reason for doing so.

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