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Oct 20, 2022
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Dual
I know deep down that I have a very dark soul
I am branded by everyone everywhere I go
Whenever people they first take a look at me
All they can seem to see is my dual personality
People always like me when I first do arrive
When I leave, they all wish that I were not alive
They do not hate me as much as I hate myself
I do not love myself; how can I love anyone else
As time goes driving by, I know that eventually
I will end up under the grass where I am meant to be
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Lavender
2 years 8 months ago
Dual
Good morning!
As usual, I always find your work defined with simple and direct language - yet powerful and complex. The title is perfect to your theme. I do hope you have taken poetry liberties here, and truly realize your many gifts. Please keep writing!
Thank you,
L
Depressed 1
2 years 8 months ago
Thanks
Thanks Lavender. I try my best.