Dungeon

Dark is the dungeon
where I dwell
my life has become a living hell

Night descends but for all I know
there could be daylight
or a candles glow

The fires of hell may be burning bright
but this I cannot see
the bread crumb trail I followed
ended inside of me

Witches on broomstick
are for fairy tale and light
other entities fill my night
leaving me pallid with fright

Incense,myrrh and candle wax
never stand a chance
as I've come to watch the demons dance
with their banner and their ax

Ablaze with summoning the powers that be
they wail and flail at the rancid air
for all and none to see

Within this dungeon
where I dwell
I am the ruler
of my own hell

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Because Ian asked

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: North Carolina, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allen Poe, James Patterson, Dean Koontz, Leonard Cohen

Comments

Ian.T

11 years 11 months ago

Chrys

I think this is a very good write, and I hope Fiction lol.
These are places that some dwell for a while it is human to do so.
It is the getting out is the problem, not sure how you get out of a hole there are many suggestions on how though lol.
Take care my thoughts to you and yours, as always, Ian.T

China Blue

11 years 11 months ago

Ian

you are the only one to comment on this poes
it has been posted for three days now. Just goes along with what I was saying in my message to you
Nothing has changed

Ian.T

11 years 11 months ago

Chrys

Please not to worry about the number of comments it is a one sided thing.
I have a terrible problem with it.
I clear out the Undiscovered place many times and the ones that are there still don't respond, I think I left Neo last Xmas time I was so cross with the whole thing, and near on did it again this week.
I know how you feel and it is a damn shame that we have to keep going along with the ones that can't do wrong.
If I put a swear word in my title I get a better response, I just don't know anymore.
I am in a workshop with Weirdelf at the moment and the going is very hard never got mentioned in dispatches even lol.
One thing I will say that you just keep posting your works here, as with mine it's a good storage space lol.
You take care out there and know we often think of you both,
Yours Ian.T

China Blue

11 years 11 months ago

Hi Beau

will go over them again and see if I am seeing what you see now if that wasn't enough to confuse you I'll think of more lol thanks for your input ok went through it again if anything gets changed it will be stanza one have to come up with something though

Rula

11 years 11 months ago

Chrys

I'm sorry to be late to come to this. I'm really lazy.
I think this piece belongs well to jess's workshop where real emotions come across to me though I wished no one would have such an experience.
Please post more. It is always great to share..

China Blue

11 years 11 months ago

rula

thanks so much foir your comments. I think it might be to late to join Jess's workshop
but I appreciate that you suggested it. What if I were to tell you that when I wrote this piece I was very much at peace with myself and the world around me