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Dye Another Day
She comes with curlers, bleach, and flair,
a mobile salon is her lair.
Blonde and breezy, wide-eyed, neat,
she knows who’s next on every street.
She trims and talks of those now gone,
of Vera’s wake and poor old Ron.
She sets your hair, you feel quite ill,
she smiles and says, ‘you got a chill?’
The clippers buzz, her scissors flash,
how suddenly you’re counting cash,
that debt unpaid, your Will unsigned,
she hums and twists, her cuts maligned.
And when she leaves, the mirror cracks,
your dog won’t sit, he can’t relax.
You cough. You sway. You feel uncertain,
as Sheila combs that final curtain.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I wrote this for my hairdresser who has a lot of older clients, me included. She is very funny although she doesn't intend to deliver humour when she visits. But she can't help herself when she's telling me tales of all the customers she's lost.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
1 month ago
I like this one...
Just a little bumble in the meter. Just one syllable in the 3d line 2nd stanza.
(And) suddenly you're counting cash. I love stories like that. Just your ordinary next -door neighbor hairdresser. Sheila? Good stuff, Geez.
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Ruby Lord
1 month ago
Hi Geezer, thank you for
Hi Geezer, thank you for reading and commenting and thank you for spotting my syllable mistake, now fixed I think?
I hope you and your wife are well and I hope she is back home with you, all better.
Take care, Ruby xx
Geezer
1 month ago
Yes...
that fixed it! The wife is home and feisty as ever. Thank you for the good wishes. ~ Geez.
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