Neopoem Of The Week Contest November 20th to 26th 2022

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Early Morning in Yosemite

Experimenting, we placed the moon
on various branches of the pines
while the morning was still very new

We considered the jealous stars above,
those not ready to depart the dawn
Amidst the chill of the Autumn air
they were invited to join us here
in our temple among the trees

About This Poem

Last Few Words: One of the most beautiful places on the planet. My muse for this write.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Comments

Geezer

2 years 7 months ago

I've seen...

the scene of the jealous stars; sitting in the bare branches of trees, next to a silver moon, which is too elegant for the company of such little twinkles. Nice job! ~ Geezer.
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