An Early Visit( February Contest)

Drying March winds in February
a deluge of spring rain flooding over the land
and poor mister cardinal is too early
with his mating song
and does not understand

Flora and fauna have woken to soon
on close observation there is still ice
around the moon

Groundhog perplexed there was no shadow
yet calendar claims
six more weeks of winter to go

Would be nice if this
early spring could last
and stay until the winter
has passed

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: north carolina usa, USA

Favorite Poets: Leonard Cohen, Edgar Alan Poe, ray Bradbury, John Grissom, .Alan S Jeeves James patterson,

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Comments

Geezer

5 years 4 months ago

At first...

I wasn't sure about this one; but after trying several different ways to read it, I found it made sense when read as though it were an entry into a diary. Nice. ~ Geezer.
P.S. too soon.
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Geezer

5 years 4 months ago

At first...

I wasn't sure about this one; but after trying several different ways to read it, I found it made sense when read as though it were an entry into a diary. Nice. ~ Geezer.
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c lynn brooks

5 years 4 months ago

geezer

thank you visiting and leaving yor comment I was thinking about all the signs of spring such as the tornaedo touching down the cardinals mating song and te flash floods when I wrote this

Gracy

5 years 4 months ago

So warm weather is arriving too soon, that would be a disaster for fruit crops and flowering bushes, etc. On our apple farm in a valley in Patagonia, the frosts would then come and "burn" all buds or tiny apples or other fruits. Lost crop, Maybe something would survive.
I like the way you've composed your poem very much. Poor cardinal...lol.
Groundhog Day is fun, saw the movie about a dozen times. Great idea to include it in your poem. I don't think I have any crits to make, but will return for another read.