Candlewitch

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(eddy styx and Dan Watts) Lady Pain lyrics

Lady Pain
by: eddy styx and Dan Watts

wild horses
couldn’t stop her
from ruining her life.
She was hell bent
on destruction
and all her
shuddering denial
denied her intentions
of exposing her
tender pink
silk and satin
underbelly
and all her
feminine frills
like tea and crumpets
she needs her fix
of love and pain
laced with daily
humiliation.

*chorus
Wild horses pull and drag with ropes of razor wire
Muscles forced tight and the pain burns like fire
She grimaces in an ecstasy of her final destruction
Stoking her inner embers with a spasm of seduction
Wild horses drag and pull with barbs of twisted wire
Limbs drawn taught but the agony won’t purify her
She screams out in her moment of sexual abduction
Releasing her flame in an orgasm of perfect corruption

She knew she could
never go home again,
because the pain
was so delicious
oh how much
she loved
the chilling rain
like a shot of
liquid barbed wire
shooting through her veins
and wild horses
couldn’t stop her…

About This Poem

Last Few Words: *lyrics

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

lou

14 years 7 months ago

Perfect and Perverted

Dan and Eddy,

I love every perverted and sadistic bit of this one. Deliciously twisted.

Lou

Hooded Stranger

14 years 7 months ago

Lou

this was a great perverted write by Cat, and I couldn't help but add a chorus.

Deliciously twisted - I like that!

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Hi Lou!

Thanks for the kudos! I knew you would be one to appreciate this write!

love, Cat

Psyve

14 years 7 months ago

Eddy and Dan

Twisted... in more ways than one.

Nicely done.

Stylistically this was interesting, as the chorus and the verses felt HARMONIOUS yet...very DIFFERENT: almost as if two different people had worked on them.The two Verses feel to me more like a poet's approach and the Chorus definitely feels like its been written with music in mind... it flows differently.

Enjoyed this

Psyve

Hooded Stranger

14 years 7 months ago

Psyve

Psyve,

I am so pleased you felt the verses and the chorus were harmonious. It is difficult when two writers with different styles create one piece.

You are so right. The verses are done by the poet and the chorus by the not so poetic!

Glad you enjoyed it,

Psyve

14 years 7 months ago

HS

I thought it might be you who did the chorus.
Good teamwork, guys.
Does this actually translate into a song that we might be able to hear at some point of time?
Psyve

Hooded Stranger

14 years 7 months ago

Psyve

Psyve,

this may well become a song. Currently I am working gard to finish off our album, but after that, this one may go through the Systema Synthetica cycle and become a fully recorded, mixed and mastered track.

I'll keep ya posted,

thanks again,

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Dear Psyve,

Dan wrote the chorus and what a fine job he did of it, too. Glad to have your discerning eye here to read and give your opinion. It is up to Dan to write the music, and he has my full confidence in his ability.

always, Cat

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 7 months ago

Cat

this is so sad, that something in her life has driven her to self destruction. there are so many things here open to Interpretation. the why is the biggest question to me. why she could not go home, was pain truly an outlet from the horrors of her pass.
well i'm starting to ramble..this is by far my favorite piece of yours and a song to boot. wow girl your fucking good at what you do, Sorry I just had to say it.
Always Eddie

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Dear Eddie,

I'm glad you liked this piece. Dan, (Hooded Stranger) played a large part in this set of lyrics, as he wrote the chorus. I actually knew a woman like this. I watched her self-destruct on drugs over a period of time. Many people, including me, tried to intervene, but to no avail. Dan has captured her with great precision. It makes me wonder if he knew someone like her. If you enjoyed this piece I'm sure you would enjoy all of Hooded Stranger's work.

always, Cat

Hooded Stranger

14 years 7 months ago

Cat

Cat,

you're giving me way too much credit for this...we have to remember my chorus was only written after you had created such an awesome poem, without that, no chorus would have been written.

I do/did know somebody similar to the character in your poem, which made my write much easier to complete.

Love,

Bonitaj

14 years 7 months ago

Cat!

This is one I recall seeing in the past - I commented then and I shall reiterate now... I love the genre and the psychopathology that goes with it! You have captured that really well here... someday I'll refer you to my professional web page and enlighten you further!
Good write
Boni

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Dear Boni,

I'd like that! Thanks for reading again, lol. Since my little experience with death, I am having a hard time with short term memories due to the drugs that I was given at the hospital. So I didn't remember if I had posted this one or not. Dan is greatly responsible for the intensity of this one. Thanks for reading and don't forget to give me your personal webpage.

love, Cat

ziggy

14 years 7 months ago

hi

hi wow this is my first read in ages here as my computer died lol
and what a write its fantastic i cant pick any fav lines on my first read
ill have to return for another feast ,,,,,,,,,,zigs x

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Dear Ziggy,

It is soooo good to have you back! Thanks for reading.

love, Cat

Hooded Stranger

14 years 7 months ago

Ziggy!

Ziggy,

you're back!...damn! I missed you.

Will email you later regarding www.hoodedstranger.com

regards and thanks for commenting on this piece,

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Dear Shirl,

It is great to hear from you, especially at this busy time of year! I'm so glad you enjoyed the write. It is a wonderful thing to have readers such as yourself.

love, Cat

Hooded Stranger

14 years 7 months ago

Shirl

Shirl,

glad you liked this piece.

I waited in at home all last week with coffee ready awaiting your visit...I was sure you were coming to England simply to see me!!

Lol!

regards,