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Eight years
Eight years, one month, eight days
Eight years, one month, eight days
after we met,
she called.
Eight years, four days
after we became lovers
she called on the phone.
Seven years, nine months, seven days
after our first fight
she called to improve her social skills
Seven years, eight months, seven days
after I had to go away for a while
she told me how alone she is
Seven years, seven months, seven days
since I came back,
bearing love and gifts
she told me of her losses
Seven years, one month, seven days
after we broke up,
she cried on the phone,
that she just felt weak,
couldn't make it,
apologised for crying at me
I said oh, hey, that's ok,
I'm honoured by your trust.
Seven years, one month, seven days
later, I hang up
and look at the phone.
About This Poem
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Comments
Kailashana2
13 years 11 months ago
I remember this.
I remember this.
About 3 years 2 months, one week and half a day give or take 4 hours ago.
It's that good!
~A
weirdelf
13 years 11 months ago
thanks, yes,
I re-posted to prove to someone in chat that I could write a love poem.
Lenny of Cohen
13 years 11 months ago
Aches and Breaks
months and days
what can I say
hmm
Jess, I love this!
L
scribbler
13 years 11 months ago
hi
i think you should write love poems more often...........stan
pleiades
13 years 11 months ago
what i like so much about
what i like so much about this, is that what is
NOT stated speaks the loudest
it's as if nothing else that happened
in those time frames mattered...time was
only measured by how it contained 'her'
and THAT, is romantic as hell
cheers
p
raj
13 years 11 months ago
Jess
would this read better?..
Seven years, eight months, seven days
while I was away
she told me how alone she is