Elegy!

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Eledgy!" shows a clear understanding of the elegiac form, using a somber tone to reflect on the passing of time, the struggle of righteous men, and the aftermath of their actions. The use of language and imagery is evocative, particularly in the lines "Their bodies strewn / across time’s tapestry" and "Their markers lie / upon the stony ground."

However, there are areas where the poem could be improved. The exclamation points used throughout the poem might be reconsidered. While they can be used to emphasize a point or express strong emotion, they can also disrupt the flow of the poem and detract from the overall tone.

In terms of structure, the poem seems to lack a consistent rhythm or meter. This can make the poem feel disjointed and can disrupt the reader's engagement. The poet might consider revising with a focus on creating a more consistent rhythm.

Lastly, the poem's theme could be developed more fully. While the poem speaks to the struggles of righteous men and the aftermath of their actions, it doesn't fully explore these ideas. The poet might consider expanding on these themes to give the reader a deeper understanding of the emotions and ideas they are trying to convey.

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Thank you for sharing this one.
I share the same hopes. A timing write indeed.
Seems like humanity goes insane these day more than any time before.
Many favorite lines, hard to choose, but the last stanza rings so true!
Thank you

This poem of yours was just what was needed to chase away my dark thoughts, today! thank you! my favorite lines are:

An entourage
of hopeful followers,
that will not bend
with Winter winds.

*much love, Cat

I'm guessing your title is meant to be "Elegy", or is there a spelled version as yours? I enjoyed the vocabulary you used in this poem. A timeless theme of course that has been around for eons.

Thomas

This brought to mind, many of the euphemisms, we hear about the wars we wage.
"This will be the "Last" World War."

"We will defeat the forces of evil"

Blah, blah blah... When will we wake up to the fact that man is his own worst enemy? We invent reasons to kill each other, and then invent better ways to do it!
You ask, when will we find a place on neutral ground, to address our souls?
I don't know if we can, but I do know that we must try. Deep stuff here, ~ Geez.
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