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Elegy for Jess Tapper
Before the skies began to fall, I was told of nature’s
latest cruelty: your disappearance. I am glad you
aren't animate for this plague borne of inattention.
But this is no time for trouble, no time to double on trouble.
A madcap from some submarinal lake in Lewis Carroll,
a Blakean sincerity searing through all you wrote, all you did.
Would this wordsmith firebrand choose to be himself once more?
coose his own storm, the fitful alterations of his rain,
each drop a small planet weighed on and burnt
by a savage sun? And this from some foreign mist,
the why not quite known but the weather severe.
Driven but uncounted by commerce, a primordial
undestroyer of the world, filing poetic kernels by humble rivers.
But this is no time for trouble, of course: no time to double
on a least bit more trouble. Ending in circumstances
modest and hidden, possessed of a gratitude always abiding,
your terrible energy knowing itself to have a stronghold
in the verb's alchemy. What do they call us in French, or English?
How are we seen? Lunar phantoms, chimerical atom spills,
monks without cells; I’ll say it, though you never did.
You are the archetypal face a writer can incarnate,
and have uncomplainingly earned this to wear.
You were an independent artist, and this is singular.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: For the one and the only Weirdelf
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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6 months 2 weeks ago
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Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Elegy for Jess Tapper
I almost feel apologetic for reading this humble tribute, as I didn't know him myself and feel as if I am intruding. I came on board a few months after his passing. But I can feel and appreciate your (and others' who left heartfelt words on his page) admiration for his work, and his forthright personality.
Condolences to you, and to all.
Lavender
Juarez5656
6 months 2 weeks ago
Thank you
But that said little to nothing about the actual poem.
Lavender
6 months 2 weeks ago
Hello, Jaurez,
Since I am not as familiar with the structure of an elegy, what I offer is basic and rough. The opening line immediately lets the reader feel the grief and almost disbelief in hearing such news, as do the references of a more personal nature regarding the poet's work and his character, which seemed to be strong and much admired. There is a feeling of pride and acceptance in the final line, a tip of the hat, per se. A very reverent honor and farewell.
There are several mentions that I don't fully understand, but probably would if I knew the poet. Still I get the feeling of high regard, especially for the respect for his poetry work. I am very drawn to a particular line (which I believe contains a typo): "...choose his own storm, the fitful alterations of his rain..." Powerful, revealing - I think revealing much more of his style and work than your own, here.
Again, what I offer is basic, but I sense this to be a sincere tribute to a well-respected poet and friend.
Thank you,
L
Juarez5656
6 months 2 weeks ago
Thank
you