Eliese (eddy styx) mild

Eliese

in the bright noonday sun
her hair was the color
of creamy golden caramel
tilting her head to peer up at me
long lashes lacing each other
on her peach blushing cheek
just dusting her captivating skin
she looked good enough to eat
(so I bit her...)

About This Poem

Last Few Words: For those who don't know, eddy styx is my male, twisted alter ego.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

weirdelf

13 years 11 months ago

[chuckles out loud!]

this is precisely what I think when I read poems comparing the beloved to edibles!

Good write!

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Jess!

I'm glad you enjoyed it and got a chuckle out of it :)

something light for eddy styx...a lite snack!

always, Cat

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Cat

How perfectly dark and disturbing,

Love Lou

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Thanks, Lou!

and you know how I love to desturb people!

always, eddy

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Thanks Yenti,

Sorry about the cracks in the mud pack! LOL!

always, eddy

Candlewitch

13 years 11 months ago

Rosi!!!

So great to see you!!! How are you dear girl? I'm so very glad you are back! You are right on course with this one!

always, eddy

raj

13 years 11 months ago

Dearest Cat...

the end lines project the fore lines ...it brings out the over powering natural human instinct to bite or taste whatever one likes....and the title "Eilese" by itself is so very delicate and savory...it lifts the poem even further..