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Embrace the Rain
In the soft putter of the rain,
secrets of the Earth are unveiled
without a hint of disdain.
When skies are gray and
time feels strained,
the rains are embraced
and hope is regained.
I wait here in the fields, a wee lass,
to see how well the rain brings on the grass
longer than a man's life.
I am praying he makes me his wife.
A symphony of love divine
though cloudy skies align
in the rain's embrace, so fine, we leap
two souls in love forever deep.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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neopoet
3 months 3 weeks ago
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Lavender
3 months 1 week ago
Embrace the Rain
Hello, Mary,
How lovely! Not certain why AI could not offer anything - but this seems a bit like a loose ode to rain. Lovely!
I noticed you listed it as free verse - it actually holds some wonderful rhyme!
Thank you!
Lx