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Jan 18, 2021
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Empty Skies
were dry today
the clouds were slow
why no one knows
the sun was out
I stepped in like a clout
the sun said go in
it's still cold
minus seven
do you want to go
early to heaven
don't cry dry your eye
don't be shy
the sun only minds does dry
laugh and stay inside
I will continue the journey
mile, mile by mile for miles
today no snow
I will own the entire sky
and never ask a LEO
ever why
he will never lie
on you his axe apply
Recalls Julius Caesar
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Lavender
4 years 6 months ago
Empty Skies
Hi, Lovedly,
"Empty skies were dry today..." Very intriguing open line. Really like it! I followed along until the reference to Leo (zodiac sign, ruled by the sun?) and the next reference to Julius Caesar. I bet I am missing an important element here...
Thank you!
L
lovedly
4 years 6 months ago
HI LAV
Sun is the RULER of the world Hence LEO===LIFE GIVING SEX CREATING the FINAL word in all existence
JULIUS CAESAR ==emblem of LOSS
Both months LEO and CANCER emerged after the assassination of Caesar by FRIEND BRUTUS.More later if you ask.
Lavender
4 years 5 months ago
Hi, Lovedly!
Ah, I understand now!
Thank you!
L
lovedly
4 years 5 months ago
Thank you Lave
Let others also read and digest
I have more on my plate today