The Endeavor

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem explores emotional emptiness through a sustained metaphor of a hollow being with holes in the feet, effectively illustrating the struggle to find fulfillment. The imagery of "holes in my feet" and the attempts to patch them with "self-care and therapy" is clear and accessible. However, the metaphor could be expanded or deepened to provide additional layers of meaning or emotional resonance. Consider clarifying or elaborating on the nature of the "winds of desperation" and how they specifically amplify dissatisfaction. Additionally, the phrase "force feed myself" is vivid but somewhat abrupt; it could benefit from additional context or imagery to enhance its impact. The poem's conclusion, expressing a hope to feel fulfilled, is relatable but somewhat expected—consider exploring a more nuanced or less predictable resolution to strengthen the emotional complexity of the piece.

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emptiness, the striving to patch the holes with tape and having it come undone, leaving yourself unfulfilled and empty.
I do believe that the word should be [singing] rather than singling, in the line "praises of dissatisfaction." ~ Geez.
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