Lavender

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Energy

I am mountain
I am sea
I am desert
I am tree

I am the taste of salt
I am the rushing rain
I am the smell of earth rising
I am red poppies of the plain

I am universal
I am the only
I am of all present
I am of the lonely

I am your vision
I am your beam
I am your light
Your realized dream

I am the dust in the stars
The infinite being
The endless space and time
The knowing, all-seeing

I am the "I Am"
Your heart, mind, and soul
The forces you exist within
The partial, the whole
The definite, the certain
Yet, still... the loss of control
I am great abundance
As I am the black hole

I am the "I Am"

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Candlewitch

1 year 3 months ago

Dear Lavender,

this is a wonderful piece, taking inventory of all you are made of. I really like it! my favorite lines are:

I am of all present
I am the only
I am the one
I am of the lonely

almost like a recipe'
*hugs, Cat

Lavender

1 year 3 months ago

Hello, Cat,

Everything is energy, and everything is connected. I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
Thank you, as always, for reading!
Lx

Candlewitch

1 year 3 months ago

Dear Lavender,

"Everything is energy, and everything is connected" Yes! and energy can be broken down but it cannot be destroyed!" Thank you for this!

*hugs, Cat

Lavender

1 year 3 months ago

Hello, Cat!

Thank you for reading again, and sharing your thoughts!
I appreciate you!
Lx

Geezer

1 year 3 months ago

I think...

that you can even up the rhythm, and make this smoother.

In nature, you exist
Within the partial, the whole

And still... loss of control

I am the abundance
I am the black hole.

I am in agreement with Candlewitch, this sounds very like a recipe.
A recipe for living; with the measurements splashed and dashed.

~ Geez.
.

Lavender

1 year 3 months ago

Hello, Geezer!

I'll think over your suggestions. I don't think this one is quite finished yet - exploring the amazing way energy connects everything around us.
Thanks for your thoughts and help with this!
L

Clentin

1 year 3 months ago

I enjoyed your preception and

I enjoyed your preception and description of the energy that surrounds us.
Great poem, I liked it very much.

Lavender

1 year 3 months ago

Hello, Clentin!

I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for reading and commenting!
L