Enough Already

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

This poem captures a strong emotional response to ongoing conflict and societal division, effectively channeling frustration and a desire for peace. The use of vivid imagery, such as "Spewing vomit vitriol" and "Pecking at life, like ravenous birds," conveys the destructive nature of hatred and misinformation. The poem’s structure, with its consistent quatrains and rhyme scheme, helps maintain a rhythmic flow that supports the urgency of the message.

However, there are areas where the poem could be strengthened. Some lines feel slightly forced to fit the rhyme, which occasionally impacts the natural cadence—for example, "The system's gaming, in how it stears" contains a typo ("stears" likely intended as "steers") that disrupts readability and rhythm. Clarifying this word would improve the flow and comprehension.

The poem’s voice is direct and confrontational, which suits the subject matter, but varying sentence length and incorporating more nuanced imagery could deepen the emotional resonance. For instance, expanding on the metaphor of "banging the drums of perpetual fear" with more sensory details might enhance the impact.

Additionally, the poem ends on a hopeful note, advocating for love and kindness, which provides a necessary counterbalance to the earlier anger. To reinforce this shift, consider developing the final stanza with more specific, tangible examples of what resistance to division might look like, making the call to action more vivid and compelling.

Overall, the poem’s thematic clarity and passionate tone are strengths, while attention to word choice, rhythm, and imagery could elevate its effectiveness.

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quest for something to thrill and captivate audiences, [thereby increasing revenue from commercials and sponsors] the media has turned to the curiosity of the public for death, destruction and mayhem. Witness the commercials of a popular insurance company who portrays a salesman that says: "Better get A*******, or you may be the victim of mayhem like me." Ever wonder about the morbid curiosity of drivers moving past a car wreck on the highway? Do they want to see a dead body or horrible injury so that they can tell everyone that "I saw..." The media has picked up on our penchant for the worst of humanity and plays all the carnage of the world for us to see and thereby causing us to become inured to the violence and "mayhem". Vengeance is mine in the movies, makes for a world ready to commit murder because we fear we may be or have been wronged. I salute you in trying to bring this to our attention, a very good job, thank you. ~ Geez.

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