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Escape From a Trait-Jacket
Love learns to forgive
friends learn "quick!", to smile,
pain will recall
every step of each mile;
betrayals hold grudges,
as each memory protects;
difficult tasks teach temperance,
while melancholy reflects.
Sincerity sounds truthful,
prepared leaders must leave;
the successful adopt, joy!
While the lonely must grieve;
Honesty can turn gullible,
lust and passion feels right;
grace showers with blessings,
where anger tries to ignite!
Tomorrow may bring surprises,
while today morphs right, past;
then the past, becomes history
so each legacy can last.
We know the meek shall inherit
while folly makes a bet,
the greedy will accumulate,
and then, deserve what they get!
While faith moves her mountains,
charity will prevail;
winners will keep winning,
but, dignity will turn frail.
The suspicious will cast doubts,
the impatient may shove;
integrity is very close,
but the greatest is, love!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I started out merely playin', with words. Guess I couldn't....stop! My, "bad"; doc.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Ian.T
13 years 3 months ago
Doc
A grand play on words and had me going there and then I realised what you were escaping from as the poem rolled effortlessly on, grand write,
Yours Ian
docmaverick
13 years 3 months ago
Thanx Ian....
...I think that I ALWAYS tend to, more or less; play with words, ya know? I thank-you for being gracious enough to feel the urge to comment.
Thanx, for that.
Sincerely,
doc.