scribbler

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ESCAPISM

There's too much ugliness by far
which we must face 'most every day
hatred, famine, senseless war,
and the evil people do and say

Bills past due sales people, rude
lay-offs and insecurity
politicians lying and being crude
loss of innocence and purity

Is it a wonder I escape this world
whenever I take pen in hand?
And write of beauty, leaves unfurled
how the sunset looks so grand?

So don't you sit and hold your breath
awaiting harsh type writes from me.
Instead of poems of riot and death
I'll tell of how the world Could be.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

arshiyafairy

13 years 11 months ago

Lovely

This is a marvelous poem with your great thoughts....I truly loved it....

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hello

I have been wondering where you were lol. Thank you for visiting and leaving such kind comment..........stan

raj

13 years 11 months ago

Hi Stan

your poem certainly exposes the worldly elements around us which affect our lives giving a feeling of helplessness and the need to get rid of the frustration through the medium of poetry and appreciating things of beauty in nature ....

i am sure you will be tweaking up this poem later...but i thought i would like to draw your attention to the last of the first stanza...

There's too much ugliness by far
which we must face 'most every day
hatred, famine, death and war;
the evil people do and say

"famine and death" are not "evils people do and say" ..therefore you will need to come up with some other alternative to express the same meaning...

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hi raj

been thinking of a mere change in punctuation to correct this. Thanks for the heads up........stan

magics02

13 years 11 months ago

Spot on

TELLING IT LIKE IT IS IN POETRY. GOOD JOB THERE CHARLIE BROWN.

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

hi

Just an explanation of why I prefer beauty in my writing as opposed to the ugliness we can find anywhere........stan

Roscoe Lane

13 years 11 months ago

Stan,

Stan, you said it and you write it in your own magical way. Regards Roscoe..

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

Hi Roscoe

Thenk you. I expect there are a few who would like my stuff to "magically" disappear lol......stan

lou

13 years 11 months ago

Stan

A well written poem, it's theme is one we can all identify with. I suppose we all deal with the world and its problems in our own way.

Hope you celebration went well.

love lou

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

Hi lou

I guess when we have trouble finding something to write about we can always write about writing lol. And few days off were very relaxing...........stan

scribbler

13 years 11 months ago

Hi Rose

Hmm... how the world could be might need a poem of its own don't you think?. Also wanted to emphasize Could without it being taken for shouting. But please don't think I'm blowing you off lol. Thanks for coming by with ideas.........stan