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Feb 14, 2015
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Eulogy
Breathing deep
the drinking hard
he's forgotten all
about the card
light under the door
throbbing and angry
its against him
against him
how he tries
they just dont care
His rage wells
and he thrusts
down the handle
and falling shoves
his way in
the words roaring
out
in her hands the
scissors
the glue the glitter
she nicks her
hand
This mess he curses
his narrowed
eyes
the fumes
against the
tension
in the room
He collapses in
his chair
spinning down
waking cheerful
shes left
cleared the house
His wife cuts him
down with a look
sears him in silence
the snub
on the table is a card
smudged in blood
"Happy Valentines..
Daddy I love you"
..
About This Poem
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Comments
judyanne
10 years 4 months ago
excellent
So well written, as usual
It's a different theme from you - I haven't read anything in this vein from you before...
Powerful anyway
Thank you Steve
Love judy
xxx
mand
10 years 4 months ago
Hi Steve
I'm guessing he felt guilty, softened and smiled when he saw the valentines card. You paint a word picture with skill and great effect. I think parents will easily relate to this one.
Very well done. :) xxx
Love Mand xxx