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Evening by the sea

An evening by the sea shore,
my mind often ponders,
Over whelmed by nature's beauty,
Dumbstruck by the wonders.

Be it the infinity of the sky,
Or the vastness of the sea,
Who's is who's shadow,
A question that will be.

Do they run along eternally,
Or merge to become one,
What is more beautiful,
The starry sky or the rising sun.

The uncertainty of the bond,
Of the shore, waves and breeze,
Is it the kiss of a lover,
Or just a friends tease,

As I was sitting alone,
Watching the sky change its hue,
With the dazzling beauty,
Quite an audience it suddenly drew,

With all those unanswered questions,
Only one thing I did understand,
All I can be is a mere spectator,
Even to the sand running through my hand.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: Uk

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Geezer

Geezer

3 years 7 months ago

Good rhythm...

I get the feeling that we are all just spectators on this whirling ball of life. Nice stuff! ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 7 months ago

Nice!!

Exquisite piece! I enjoying reading such shortness of stanzas! Beautiful composition!!

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 7 months ago

hello,

I very much liked your poem. I found it a bit of enchantment in it, I thank you for that :)

*hugs, Cat