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Feb 09, 2023
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Evil Night
Evil is in the air
I can feel it in my bones.
I pray to God but he doesn't
hear me so I feel very
much alone.
The dark moon it rises
high up in the sky.
I can hear the wolves howling
and it makes me want to hide.
The devil he is lurking
calling his demons far and wide.
What am I going to do besides
lay my head down and die.
Should I give my soul or should
I try to keep my faith even though
I know all my faith is gone.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Hi Heather
That first stanza is a bit awkward.
Evil is in the air
I can feel it in my bones.
I pray to God but
he doesn't hear me
so I feel very much alone.
I think the rest is very smooth and this will make that first stanza rhythmically similar to the others.
Nice work,
Tim
Heather Perry
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you
Thank you for the song. I loved it.