Evil sits deeply

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:

The poem employs the five senses as a structural device, with each stanza inviting the reader to experience evil through a different sensory modality. This approach provides a clear organizational framework and helps to immerse the reader in the poem’s atmosphere. The progression from "Listen" to "Taste" moves from external perception to internal experience, culminating in the bodily invasion of evil, which is an effective escalation.

The language is direct and accessible, favoring clarity over ambiguity. The use of phrases such as "propaganda in the wind," "howling of their lies," and "toxic cancer" relies on familiar metaphors, which may make the poem’s themes immediately recognizable but risks diminishing originality. The poem’s diction is consistent, maintaining a somber and foreboding tone throughout.

The line breaks and stanza lengths are mostly regular, but some enjambments, such as "Yet this silence came, / To muffle your desperate groans," create a pause that emphasizes the sense of suppression and helplessness. The poem’s closing lines effectively reinforce the theme of silenced suffering.

The poem could benefit from more concrete imagery or specific details to ground its abstractions. For example, "deceptive faces" and "secrets locked away" are general descriptions; more vivid or unexpected images might deepen the emotional impact. Additionally, the poem’s reliance on common tropes of evil and darkness may limit its distinctiveness.

Overall, the poem’s structure and thematic coherence are strengths, but further development of imagery and specificity could enhance its memorability and emotional resonance.

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Hello, Tigger,

This is pretty strong in language and theme. I really like the form and the sensory references.  I think I'd remove punctuation completely  - it seems the lines in each stanza should be read as one long energetic thought.

Thank you!

L