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Clentin
Clentin
Jan 10, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Explosion

Beginning

With soft felt ripples
Comes the swelling of awakened
Emotions

Each tremor becoming a catalyst
Fed by silent smiles and
Unsolicited words

Ignited by thoughts of imagined
Happiness comes the

End

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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: USA Pennsylvania, USA

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Lavender

Lavender

2 years 6 months ago

Explosion

Hi, Clentin,
Hmm...I will be curious to read your response. Ar first read, this felt like a laugh exploding. Then reading a few more times, it feels like the awareness of true happiness while with a special someone. Maybe something else? I am wondering why it had to end...
Thank you,
L

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 6 months ago

Deep

After reading your comment the meaning of this changed for me immediately. It’s really a very good observation on these types of relationships. Family needs boundaries too and older generations feel differently about this.

Tim

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 6 months ago

dear Clentin,

my family of women were like living with three rattlesnakes. survival was the only relationship or goal. this is why I have a difficult time relating to your poem, but I would like to understand your message. can you help me with this?

*hugs, Cat