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Mar 18, 2020
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Eyes
Brown eyes that tell a story.
Grey eyes that recieve.
Grey eyes that tell a story.
Brown eyes that recieve.
Extroverted introvert.
Introverted extrovert.
They think is extroverted.
They think is introverted.
Sufferers and hurts in silence.
Suffered and hurt in silence.
Been hurt and has hurted, regrets.
Has hurt and regrets.
One side of the world.
The other side of the world.
Fake friends and fake happiness.
Real friends and fake happiness.
Gives and gives.
Gives and gives.
Loved and lost.
Got lost and has loved.
Two opposites.
Two of the same.
Two different ways to be raised.
Two ways that made them strong.
Hard life and still tries.
Lives life and secrets unknown.
Stick together like glue.
Never let go.
We may be from two different worlds.
But we understand pain.
It might not be the same.
But it holds us together.
Love, live, hope, have faith.
We keep each other strong.
And this is my story.
And this is our story.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Eumolpus
5 years 7 months ago
your poem and some thoughts
Your poem uses devises nicely. Its meanings and inferences are obvious, and it flows nicely.
a word to the wise. Don't ever insult your reader with comments such as you've added. Don't ever say your poem has meaning to it, challenging a reader to be smart enough to figure it out. There are many sophisticated readers here, this is not a sophisticated poem. Don't try to suggest "hidden meanings' like your poetry is a game show. It makes you sound arrogant, amateur, and aloof.
Geezer
5 years 7 months ago
Amen...
I do agree. ~ Geezer.
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