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Face Your Destiny
Do you believe you can attain your dreams
without the sweat of true dedication?
You hope to receive when you've done nothing,
but there're no rewards for missing actions
A stagnant life, collecting fantasies
worth nothing in the face of reality
Reach for the fire within and commit
your heart and soul to embrace a purpose!
May perseverance be the steel of will.
and you'll be, a gift to all, not a curse
Face your destiny wiith pride and courage
as a true warrior in the coming of age
Rise when you fall and continue the fight
failures will make your victory sweeter
as long as you refuse to surrender
a day will come when you'll be the winner!
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Seren
10 years 2 months ago
Hello hon
I am still very sick I'll keep it short you have come a long way since you started here but I still feel there's so much more you've not shown us yet, I liked the poem very much so ill come back tonight its 7am I've been up all night lol opps ... I'll make one or two suggestions
Take care love and hugs Jayne xox
alidzain
10 years 2 months ago
Hi Jayne
I'm sorry to hear that you're still sick. Will be waiting for your suggestions. You take care, my friend.
Alid
emeka ozurumba
10 years 2 months ago
rudyard kipling
his poems are a reminder, that you write something very inspirational, just like him
alidzain
10 years 2 months ago
Thanks, Emeka
for the visit and the comment.
Alid
raj
10 years 2 months ago
I liked this Alid
I liked this Alid
alidzain
10 years 2 months ago
Thanks, Raj
Glad you like this.
Alid