A Facsimile of the Human Psyche, Unravelled

I have prayed, before
and got a positive response
but then, much to my dismay;

I found my wish
for peaceful bliss,
won't be turning out that way.

Expect too much,
dissappointment will be your crutch,
the rays of regret will rain until your face gets burned,

because it all adds up
to another empty cup,
and just another lesson to be learned.

What I'm goin' through
is a kind of healing time
for both my broken heart, and head;

but, these waves of grief
keeps burnin' my eyes,
from all the hurtful things that were said.

Expect too much
and dissappointment will be your crutch,
the rays of regret will rain until your face gets burned,

because it all adds up,
to another empty cup
and just another lesson to be learned.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This is my entry into the contest that Ms. Shirley Harrison spoke of, to me. doc.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

Comments

lou

14 years 7 months ago

RE: Contest

Is this an entry for the Newsletter contest? If it is you have applied in the incorrect manner, the purpose of the contest is for the winning poem to be featured in the newsletter, if you wish to enter another poem, can you email it to me at louise.mcwhorter@neopoet.com

lou

14 years 7 months ago

the contest

the contest will carry on as planned, everyone who has entered will still have a chance at winning.

lou

14 years 7 months ago

Contest

it has come to my attention that most of the people who have entered the Newsletter contest, have misunderstood the rules of entry, and so this month's contest will be judged and the winning poem will be published in December's issue.

But in future entries for the Newsletter contest, should not be posted on stream, prior to entry in the contest, they should be emailed to me at louise.mcwhorter@neopoet.com

For the rules of entry , please refer to my blog.

thank you

Lou

scribbler

14 years 7 months ago

unravelled

This is a great poem doc. Using the required line as the title never occurred to me lol..........scribbler

docmaverick

14 years 6 months ago

Scribbler...

..sorry to say but, it's the ONLY thing that occurred, to me.
~doc.