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Jun 24, 2012
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Fading Memories
for just a moment
our love existed
then like a mist
it was gone
the sight of red roses growing
in backyards
remind me of the time
we spent together
and seared petals
that bloomed to early
withered in the light
herbs thriving in drooping baskets
from rooftops
makes me think of you
prosperous veggies
outside in the backyard
make me smile
the thing I missed the most
is your strong shoulders
taking me in your arms
carrying my weaken body
into your palace
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
13 years ago
Barbara
That someone is in so many things seems to point out that they are still there no matter how or why they are not physical..
Hold onto these things they will be needed later..
Loved the memories there in your eyes I have many of those also But!!!!!!
Yours Ian.T
Barbara Writes
13 years ago
Ian
thanks your comment are always so refreshing.
Candlewitch
13 years ago
Dear Barbara,
It sounds like a summer time love to me :)
In this line:
carrying my weaken body
should it be: carrying my {weakened} body?
a good read.
always, Cat
Barbara Writes
13 years ago
You are so right
I will chsnge that now
Thanks for reading and the suggestions