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Jan 02, 2023
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Fairy Tales
Only in fairy tales are we able to see
all of the characters we are able to be.
Some days the pauper, some days the queen
others, the princess, sometimes the king.
But when we are nasty and ever so mean
the role of the troll can often be seen.
Whatever our mood, whatever our need
there is always an appropriate story to read.
Without tiny stories and beautiful dreams
we have no way to muffle life’s screams.
The beauty of fairy tales should never be lost
there is no possible way to repay the cost.
Always remember, although words all they be
each has his stories through which he can see.
Each has a harbor, a safe place, a nook
all neatly portrayed in some fairytale book.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 6 months ago
I like this...
I appreciated the rhyme and the sentiments; they made reading it a pleasure. One thing I might change if I were you, is the last line. Instead of: some childlike book, I would say some [fairytale] book. Nice work, welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Lavender
2 years 6 months ago
Fairy Tales
Clentin,
I enjoyed this very much. It sails along in rhythm and rhyme, and the theme is inspiring. I agree with Geezer regarding the final line about "childlike" book. "Fairly tale" or perhaps "childhood" book since the previous stanza is reflecting on one's personal stories. This is a fun and delightful read.
L
Triskelion
2 years 6 months ago
Welcome
..to Neopoet, Clentin. Thank you for writing in rhyme and meter. I will be looking for more from you.
Thomas
Clentin
2 years 6 months ago
Thank you. I am trying to get
Thank you. I am trying to get poems written while at the same time using different
Methods.
RoseBlack
2 years 6 months ago
I enjoyed this
The correlation between fairy tales and reality are quite true. Most of us wear many different hats throughout the course of a day and really throughout our whole lives. A clever write. Well done.
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 6 months ago
Tight
Very strict structural arrangement. Good theme. I also like that idea and I think you’ve done well constructing a coherent poem. I spent a minute or twenty years bitching about my life being no fairytale. Then I decided to make it one. It’s not working out exactly as planned but it beats the alternative, which just a bunch of misplaced emotions. I like this.
Tim
Clentin
2 years 6 months ago
Thank yo
Thank yo
Alex Tanner
2 years 6 months ago
Very good
A pleasure to read, sails along beautifully. I look forward to more.
Alex.