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Jun 24, 2011
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Fallen
It was love at first sight
Or so they say,
I lost my heart
So why give it Away.
He came unannounced
From the back of beyond
I couldn't believe my eyes!
Here was love,
Here was an angel in disguise
I made an ass of myself
When I was caught in the act -
Lurging forward as if to attack.
He smiled at me, to give me some slack.
So as with Adam
Who blamed it on Eve
I said my goodbyes
and took my leave!
Bj 24 June '11
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just for fun... And THE CLICHE'S WORKSHOP
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
14 years 3 months ago
Hey Boni,
Verrry good! Made me smile. Good use of cliches!
always, Cat
Bonitaj
14 years 3 months ago
Thanks Cat!
it's actually too easy to write in cliched, proverbial format! So this is really a 'no-brainer' ;)
Glad I made you smile though!
Boni
Kailashana2
14 years 3 months ago
For a moment I thought, thank
For a moment I thought, thank God---a POEM! Then I woke up to another cliche ;-)
~A
Hooded Stranger
14 years 3 months ago
Boni
Boni,
I have horrible feeling that after the workshops on cliches, it is going to be a new genre and we'll all be writing in cliches only!!
Actually we should see about have a competition on who can do the worst poem about cliches.
I liked your poem as it had a whole new fresh set of cliches.
regards,
HS
Bonitaj
14 years 3 months ago
Thanks guys!
This one really was JUST FOR FUN... but it gave me the idea to use PROVERBS/PROVERBIAL EXPRESSIONS as another genre for another collection? Interestingly, so many of the more well known ones already fall into the CLICHE Category!
Cheers!
Boni
CCfire
14 years 2 months ago
lol These are making me
lol These are making me shudder truly but I know it's the workshop so I am trying to just smile and think they are all doing a good job at them :P
raj
14 years 2 months ago
Boni...
subtle use of cliches not too harsh..i wonder why you took a female perspective while writing this one...in doing so you have made women look nicer than men...LOL...