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Jun 24, 2011
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Fallen
It was love at first sight
Or so they say,
I lost my heart
So why give it Away.
He came unannounced
From the back of beyond
I couldn't believe my eyes!
Here was love,
Here was an angel in disguise
I made an ass of myself
When I was caught in the act -
Lurging forward as if to attack.
He smiled at me, to give me some slack.
So as with Adam
Who blamed it on Eve
I said my goodbyes
and took my leave!
Bj 24 June '11
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just for fun... And THE CLICHE'S WORKSHOP
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
14 years ago
Hey Boni,
Verrry good! Made me smile. Good use of cliches!
always, Cat
Bonitaj
14 years ago
Thanks Cat!
it's actually too easy to write in cliched, proverbial format! So this is really a 'no-brainer' ;)
Glad I made you smile though!
Boni
Kailashana2
14 years ago
For a moment I thought, thank
For a moment I thought, thank God---a POEM! Then I woke up to another cliche ;-)
~A
Hooded Stranger
14 years ago
Boni
Boni,
I have horrible feeling that after the workshops on cliches, it is going to be a new genre and we'll all be writing in cliches only!!
Actually we should see about have a competition on who can do the worst poem about cliches.
I liked your poem as it had a whole new fresh set of cliches.
regards,
HS
Bonitaj
14 years ago
Thanks guys!
This one really was JUST FOR FUN... but it gave me the idea to use PROVERBS/PROVERBIAL EXPRESSIONS as another genre for another collection? Interestingly, so many of the more well known ones already fall into the CLICHE Category!
Cheers!
Boni
CCfire
13 years 12 months ago
lol These are making me
lol These are making me shudder truly but I know it's the workshop so I am trying to just smile and think they are all doing a good job at them :P
raj
13 years 12 months ago
Boni...
subtle use of cliches not too harsh..i wonder why you took a female perspective while writing this one...in doing so you have made women look nicer than men...LOL...