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This poem is part of the workshop:

Olympic Pool (initial workshop)

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Fallen

It was love at first sight
Or so they say,
I lost my heart
So why give it Away.

He came unannounced
From the back of beyond
I couldn't believe my eyes!
Here was love,
Here was an angel in disguise

I made an ass of myself
When I was caught in the act -
Lurging forward as if to attack.
He smiled at me, to give me some slack.

So as with Adam
Who blamed it on Eve
I said my goodbyes
and took my leave!

Bj 24 June '11

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just for fun... And THE CLICHE'S WORKSHOP

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

14 years 3 months ago

Hey Boni,

Verrry good! Made me smile. Good use of cliches!

always, Cat

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years 3 months ago

Thanks Cat!

it's actually too easy to write in cliched, proverbial format! So this is really a 'no-brainer' ;)
Glad I made you smile though!
Boni

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years 3 months ago

Boni

Boni,

I have horrible feeling that after the workshops on cliches, it is going to be a new genre and we'll all be writing in cliches only!!

Actually we should see about have a competition on who can do the worst poem about cliches.

I liked your poem as it had a whole new fresh set of cliches.

regards,

HS

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years 3 months ago

Thanks guys!

This one really was JUST FOR FUN... but it gave me the idea to use PROVERBS/PROVERBIAL EXPRESSIONS as another genre for another collection? Interestingly, so many of the more well known ones already fall into the CLICHE Category!
Cheers!
Boni

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 2 months ago

lol These are making me

lol These are making me shudder truly but I know it's the workshop so I am trying to just smile and think they are all doing a good job at them :P

R

raj

14 years 2 months ago

Boni...

subtle use of cliches not too harsh..i wonder why you took a female perspective while writing this one...in doing so you have made women look nicer than men...LOL...