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This poem is part of the workshop:

Olympic Pool (initial workshop)

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Fallen

It was love at first sight
Or so they say,
I lost my heart
So why give it Away.

He came unannounced
From the back of beyond
I couldn't believe my eyes!
Here was love,
Here was an angel in disguise

I made an ass of myself
When I was caught in the act -
Lurging forward as if to attack.
He smiled at me, to give me some slack.

So as with Adam
Who blamed it on Eve
I said my goodbyes
and took my leave!

Bj 24 June '11

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just for fun... And THE CLICHE'S WORKSHOP

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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Comments

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years ago

Thanks Cat!

it's actually too easy to write in cliched, proverbial format! So this is really a 'no-brainer' ;)
Glad I made you smile though!
Boni

Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Boni

Boni,

I have horrible feeling that after the workshops on cliches, it is going to be a new genre and we'll all be writing in cliches only!!

Actually we should see about have a competition on who can do the worst poem about cliches.

I liked your poem as it had a whole new fresh set of cliches.

regards,

HS

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

14 years ago

Thanks guys!

This one really was JUST FOR FUN... but it gave me the idea to use PROVERBS/PROVERBIAL EXPRESSIONS as another genre for another collection? Interestingly, so many of the more well known ones already fall into the CLICHE Category!
Cheers!
Boni

CCfire

CCfire

13 years 12 months ago

lol These are making me

lol These are making me shudder truly but I know it's the workshop so I am trying to just smile and think they are all doing a good job at them :P

R

raj

13 years 12 months ago

Boni...

subtle use of cliches not too harsh..i wonder why you took a female perspective while writing this one...in doing so you have made women look nicer than men...LOL...