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RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Nov 15, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Fallen Leaves

I am the fallen leaves
From a tree that's lived too long
Wilting branches
Broken at the seams

My tears are that
Of the willow
Weeping, grieving
For this life I had

I've been dead inside
Longer than alive

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Jackweb

Jackweb

2 years 8 months ago

Deep thought!

Amazing! Every word is perfect. The layers are thick in metaphor. Great job.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 8 months ago

dear RoseBlack

Autumn is my season. I feel an affinity to her. she is morbidly artistic in raw truth and so is this piece. very well done.

*hugs, the Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 8 months ago

Thank you Cat

I have missed you and hope you are doing well. Autumn is my season as well and I'm always a bit sad to see her go.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 8 months ago

dear Rose

I am doing better with both the covid and the resulting of my fall. the bruises are bone deep. with the covid, it keeps giving me shots of extreme symptoms , I won't gross you out by writing them here. I sleep a lot. drop by here as often as I can. watching over y'all as a benevolent spirit ;)

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 8 months ago

Hopefully

You will be on the mend soon. I had covid in the beginning of October and the fatigue was the worst for me. The rest felt like I had the flu.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 8 months ago

covid sucks...

I am not far from the bathroom, but I've had a few "accidents" unable to get there in time. I sleep a lot too. my legs are terribly fatigued. slowly I am starting to feel better. thanks for your good thoughts for my well being. much appreciated.

Steven is an angel, he waits on me hand and foot, as they used to say. he has cleaned me up a few times after a bathroom fiasco. most of the time, I feel like a limp noodle.

*hugs, Cat

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 8 months ago

A look at...

the barren side of a relationship. You really made this one stand out! It was brief but was full of expression.
Nice job! ~ Geez.
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Lavender

Lavender

2 years 8 months ago

Fallen Leaves

Hi, RoseBlack,
The title and the theme throughout reveal an overwhelming weariness along with the spoken grief. Wonderful vivid imagery.
L