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Nov 02, 2014
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The Fat Black Cat Limerick WS
*A little girl next door
went to the store
to get some candy
she saw a fat black cat in her path,
ran screaming out the door and in the grass boys laughed and rolled.*
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
10 years 8 months ago
Getting there, Barbara
there is poignancy but the meter is really quite out. Do read some classic limericks out loud too get the feel of the comic musicality of the form.
This does not "sound" like a limerick
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/the-fat-black-cat-limerick-by
Barbara Writes
10 years 8 months ago
Jess
I heard the difference
Barbara Writes
10 years 8 months ago
Jess
I've listened to your limericks on the soundcloud. How is this?
weirdelf
10 years 8 months ago
last line still to long,
but it is a very good poem.
Barbara Writes
10 years 8 months ago
Jess
I thought long was okay?
weirdelf
10 years 8 months ago
read these aloud!
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/examples-of-limericks
I'm sick of saying it.
It's not AABBA, it is lyrics
read them aloud.
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/examples-of-limericks