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Feb 01, 2011
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Feel
I don't want to feel anymore
I can't take the pain
I don't want to care
I don't want to feel anymore
It sears and it burns
Creating hell.
I don't want to feel anymore
I can't cope, anymore
I can't take the strain
I want to Switch off
I can't mask my inner turmoil anymore
Switch off the insanity
I dont want to feel anymore
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
lou
14 years 5 months ago
Ian
This poem falls into the category, of auto biographical, but only on occasion, if felt like this constantly, it wouldn't be worth continuing.
lou
mand
14 years 5 months ago
Hi Lou
Like Yenti says, not sure if this is what you are feeling like right now - I wish I was there with you. ((((hug)))). I feel for you, we all have different circumstances, no two people feel exactly the same, given the same circumstance/upbringing etc. So what you are going through is unique to you. I do Know how terrible it feels in your head when your head is swimming around in negativity. ( torture ). I'm sorry your going through the agony.
Know that we care Lou.
I agree with Yenti, if this is fiction then it has a strong emotional impact.
I hope, for your sake, it is fictional.
Love Mand xxxxxxxxxx
lou
14 years 5 months ago
Mand
Thank you very much , as i see it poems have several functions, one being a mental clear ou,t or at least a way for the author to sort thoughts out, another function is allow the reader feel somehing they may not have experience of..
You're a really nice person
much love lou
mand
14 years 5 months ago
Hi Lou
True. Thumbs up to both.
Brilliant poem
Love Mand xxxx
Candlewitch
14 years 5 months ago
Dear Lou,
I don't want to feel anymore
I can't cope, anymore
I can't take the strain
I'm with Shirl on this one. Very raw and powerful. I wouldn't change a word of it.
Here's my (((Hug))) too!
love, Cat
lou
14 years 5 months ago
Oh thank you Cat
you are so sweet and kind.
love Lou
Kailashana2
14 years 5 months ago
Yeah, well I'm a glutton for
Yeah, well I'm a glutton for punishment or I'd have offed my character long ago, but I know exactly what you mean... in fact, I'm waiting for my own personal doomsday, or so it may seem.
(It's not being on the miserable side or the happy-go-lucky bouncing baby side, it's this fucking to'ing and fro'ing that's wearing me down like a clown full of stage-fright and that's never a pretty sight.)
~A
Race_9togo
14 years 5 months ago
Lou,
Show me someone who has never felt this way, and I'll show you a psychotic, or a god!
Been feeling like this myself, recently.
You nailed it exactly.
Nothing I would change, no criticism to make.