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lovedly
lovedly
Jun 05, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Few Things I Don’t Know

Millions have come and gone away
none has ever come back till this day
then why amass wealth
and leave it all, who for
can the wisest one really say

Yes
You will be remembered by those
who enjoy the wealth you left behind
but how will you ever know
since while living foolish you were also

O the wisest one you alone have a brain
Come over we will catch the next train
and roam about till the wealth does sustain
kick me off, far off. when nothing does remain

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read , and they inspire..

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lovedly

lovedly

7 years 1 month ago

Such a thoughtful comment

and coming from a great songster
elates me like a balloon
many tried to deflate soon
thank you for the kindness
of time spent on
POEMS OF
Lovedly

U R NO MORE
a lol
MAIDEN

R

raj

7 years 1 month ago

Hi Lovedly

I believe this is one of your more serious writes which is substantive and has the potential to tidy it up...will watch what edits you do going forward...i found the concluding line jarring...
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lovedly

lovedly

7 years 1 month ago

why did you find it jarring

that's the finality of all existence
when one's pockets are empty finally
one is done
do advise I am always open

R

raj

7 years 1 month ago

because I consider wealth as

because I consider wealth as not just material / money but it is much more than that
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R

raj

7 years 1 month ago

Lovedly is this really about

Lovedly is this really about your poetry and comments or your observations about me and my life style?
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