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sewie smalls
sewie smalls
Oct 13, 2017 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

Little Red Wagon

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on the field (october contest)

He was beautiful to see
abs bulging
star struck was I
as he pulled this wagon
a red wagon full of hearts
mine I left bare and naked
like soil filled with humus

On the field that day
we tilled the soil of our hearts
planting seeds of love
having no care
even the sky was cognizant
as she cried with joy for us

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: nigeria, NGA

Favorite Poets: rupi kaur, wole soyinka

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Comments

lovedly

lovedly

7 years 8 months ago

hope

you win again
nice hearty poem
ah red wagon

you may please revisit
the contest limitations
and expectations

Geezer

Geezer

7 years 8 months ago

Sewie...

I like this a lot. I like the title, the theme and the rhythm.
It left me with some good visuals. Good luck in the contest. ~ Geezer.
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