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raw emotions laid threadbare is how i rate this live wire write of yours...

I felt the strength of emotion, the need of something unfulfillable. My only criticism is, that I would not have used the contraction, [ you're ] I would have spelled it out as two words. [ You are ]. ~ Gee

Superb writing here! Loved it all.

always, Cat

there is freedom in deciet
a game of chance
for a prize thats rigged
always more alluring
then the easy moves

sometimes "what ifs"
taste better in thought
then the "sure thing"

great poem Lou
gritty and surreal!

Really well well written, very effective. Ending a poem with a question is tricky. Maybe you could have a look at the need for that.

As part of your body of work, you know what I think.

jeezum, it never fails to amaze me how people know exactly what i feel on this site. no suggestions necessary on my part!